The Slide

It was 7:30 in the morning and it was a school day today and we were going on a school trip to bo-bo land so I went to school and bo-bo land was so cool I had to go on one more thing and it was the terror slide of doom it looked so big and it looked like a tunnel so I went down it and it shot me too fast it made me go back in time to the point that he was going down the slide so he didn't and went home.That slide was so slippery.

                                                                The End
This is a draft piece of writing. comment on what I can do better.

My Family and House

                                            This is a story about my house and my family.
I have one frog and two fish at my dads house and two cats at my mums house and I have one dad one mum and one brother.
My mums house has lot of coffee bean smells and  stairs, four bedrooms, three bathrooms, three toilets, one trampoline, one backyard, one kitchen, one front yard, two living rooms and one movie room.My dads house is a fridge and it has has three bedrooms, one bathroom, one toilet, one backyard, one front yard and one kitchen.

I Love Learning

This is my poster of learning.Here is what I put in it my pop art photo,super hero photo,book fair photo,basket ball photo and computer.

Olympics

Puppet show

This is a puppet show I created with Dakota using the puppetpals app. What did you enjoy about it?

Writing

Today we watched a video clip for writing and this is my writing

                                                                

                                                   The moon walk

 Wow I'm on the bright shinny moon and I got called over for something I don't know what it's for

I went down I didn't see the brown boat so I went back up and the gold stars were gone I looked up and saw a giant star I jumped on it and it flow off  it took me to a place of animals and candy

and there I saw my grandpa and dad we stayed there for ever and ever
and did every we could there. (Did I say it was a magic island so we would never die).

                                                                       The End
This is my draft piece of writing please comment on what I can do better.

maori language week

Ko wai To Kura
what is your school called?

Ka pai To mahi
I like your work

Arohaina mai
Excuse me /sorry

Kohi Kohia nga rapihi
pick up the rubbish